2020年10月31日雅思大作文真題解析及高分范文

2023-05-28 15:51:51 來源：中國教育在線

實現(xiàn)生活目標(biāo)主要是運氣使然嗎？

Whether or not a person achieves his aims in life is mostly a question of luck? （2020/10/31)

一、解析&審題

題材：工作

題型：Discussion

關(guān)鍵詞：aims in life + mostly + luck

需要討論的觀點：實現(xiàn)生活目標(biāo)，主要是靠運氣嗎？

建議思路：運氣對于成功很重要，但成功主要依靠努力。

復(fù)現(xiàn)情況：新題

本次考試的題目和上次一樣也是新題，雖然如此，這個題目是大家比較熟悉的話題，因此寫起來應(yīng)該不缺少素材。

此外，需要注意的是，本題中包含了一個表示程度的mostly，這個詞與best一樣，大家可以在它上面做文章。

本題可以按照如下思路來寫：

首先，成功有時的確需要運氣。【比如好的出身，好的天賦的確可以幫助人們成功】

其次，運氣不是成功最重要的要素，努力才是?！緵]有運氣，很多人也成功；有了運氣，很多人也不成功，由此認(rèn)定，運氣不是最重要的?！?/p>

結(jié)論：實現(xiàn)生活目標(biāo)，主要靠努力，而不是運氣，但是若有運氣的眷顧，成功更容易來到。因此努力是成功的發(fā)動機，運氣頂多可以成為加速器。

二、高分范文

Many people think that luck plays the most significant role in a successful life, but in my view, to achieve success in life, one needs continuous hard work, though luck does help in some cases.

Luck may assume different forms and help people in various ways. A man luckily born into a wealthy family will stand a better chance of becoming a successful businessman than one with poor family background. A person with a naturally good voice will be more likely to achieve his aim of becoming a great singer than one without.

However,luck alone cannot make a successful life. The most essential element of success is hard work. Therefore, even without rich parents, a man could still become a successful businessman if he works hard enough. Likewise, without a naturally good voice, a man could still become a great singer as long as he keeps on practising. In fact, we have seen many people who have failed to achieve their life's aims even though they appear to be very lucky in the first place. One good example is Zhong Yong in a Chinese story, who is so luckily talented as to be able to compose excellent poems as a seven-year-old child. Then his parents treat him as a money-making machine, showing off his talent around the country, and pretty soon he loses his natural talent and becomes an average child.

My conclusion, then, is that while luck may contribute to our success in life, hard work is what really makes us successful. As is suggested in the old saying "God helps those who help themselves", I believe hard work should become the engine of our life, and luck can at best be the accelerator.

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三、高分范文解析

Many people think that luck plays the most significant role in a successful life, but in my view, to achieve success in life, one needs continuous hard work, though luck does help in some cases.

許多人認(rèn)為運氣在成功的生活中起著最重要的作用，但在我看來，要在生活中取得成功，一個人需要不斷的努力工作，盡管運氣在某些情況下確實有幫助。

解析

(1) 本段開門見山，直接復(fù)述題目觀點，然后給出自己的觀點。

(2) Achieve 實現(xiàn)

(3) Continuous 持續(xù)不斷的

運氣可以用不同的形式，以各種方式幫助人們。一個幸運地出生在富裕家庭的人比一個家庭背景不好的人更有可能成為一個成功的商人。一個天生好聲音的人比一個沒有天生好聲音的人更有可能實現(xiàn)成為一名偉大歌手的目標(biāo)。

解析

(1) 本段用舉例的方式證明運氣可能幫助人們實現(xiàn)生活目標(biāo)。本題關(guān)鍵詞是“實現(xiàn)生活目標(biāo)”，因此論證中應(yīng)結(jié)合“生活目標(biāo)”討論。本段“成為成功商人”和“成為偉大歌手”都是“生活目標(biāo)”的例子。

(2) Assume 呈現(xiàn)；承擔(dān)

(3) Various 各種不同的

(4) Stand a better chance of... 有更好的機會做.......

However, luck alone cannot make a successful life. The most essential element of success is hard work. Therefore, even without rich parents, a man could still become a successful businessman if he works hard enough. Likewise, without a naturally good voice, a man could still become a great singer as long as he keeps onpractising. In fact, we have seen many people who have failed to achieve their life's aims even though they appear to be very lucky in the first place. One good example is Zhong Yong in a Chinese story, who is so luckily talented as to be able to compose excellent poems as a seven-year-old child. Then his parents treat him as a money-making machine, showing off his talent around the country, and pretty soon he loses his natural talent and becomes an average child.

然而，光靠運氣是不能成功的。成功最基本的要素是努力工作。因此，即使沒有富有的父母，一個人如果足夠努力，仍然可以成為一個成功的商人。同樣，沒有天生的好嗓子，一個人仍然可以成為一個偉大的歌手，只要他堅持練習(xí)。事實上，我們已經(jīng)看到許多人未能實現(xiàn)他們的生活目標(biāo)，即使他們起初似乎是非常幸運的。一個很好的例子是中國故事中的仲永，他很幸運地?fù)碛刑熨x，七歲就能夠?qū)懗鰞?yōu)秀的詩歌。然后他的父母把他當(dāng)作賺錢機器，在全國炫耀他的才華，很快他就失去了他的天賦，成為一個普通的孩子。

解析

(1) 本段討論運氣不是成功的充分條件，提出努力對于成功更為重要。

(2) Alone 僅僅

(3) Likewise 同樣

(4) Keep on doing... 堅持做......

(5) In the first place 起初；首先

(6) Compose 創(chuàng)作

(7) Average 普通的

因此，我的結(jié)論是，雖然運氣可能有助于我們在生活中的成功，但努力工作才是真正使我們成功的原因。正如老話“上帝幫助那些幫助自己的人”所說的那樣，我認(rèn)為努力工作應(yīng)該成為我們生活的引擎，運氣充其量只能是加速器。

解析

(1) 本段總結(jié)前面的討論，并換一種方式重新表達(dá)自己的觀點，即“運氣不是最重要的，努力才是最重要的”。

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