雅思教育類作文范文點評

　　雅思教育類作文范文點評

　　Score 1

　　Nowadays, many people think that the people who always telling the truth is the mostimportant consideration in any relationship between human, but another think that is necessary to tell some lies. It is seldom to reach the same issue. I agree with the first thinking because of the following reasons.First of all. we all live in the realized world, people can respect you unless you want to use correct method to communicate with other people. It is very important, especially in business. if you want to receive the good result.you must tell the truth about your own.Secondly, if you are honest man/woman. many people may be want to make friend with you. You can have more chance to communicate with other people. you may be gain more information from them.However. sometimes we must speak some lies. For example. when our relatives have heavy illness such as cancer. we couldn't telling them the true. because that not good for their health. and may be affect their life.In conclusion. telling the truth is the people's good behavior. we must require most of people to tell the truth. Thus, we can see the better world in our life unless we always tell the true. (206 words)　　范文點評:

　　這篇文章有語言問題《幾乎沒有一句話是正確的)，而且語言問題都比較嚴，(無法理解的表達或者非英語習(xí)慣的表達，比如第二段中的“realized world’和'considement') ,第三段和第四段幾乎無法理解。因此.本文只能得到1分。

　　2010年1月16日獨立寫作點評與示范

　　真題回放一Children should choose the jobs similar to their parents' or choose the jobs different from their parents.

　　Do you agree with this statement: It is better for children to choose the jobs of their parents?

　　資深老師點評:本題按照題材分類屬于“父母，兒童教育和成長.類別中的父母與子女教育問題.在題庫中與此類似的題目有:

　　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older(15-to 18-year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

　　Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

　　從題目的提問方式Do you agree ?本文題材屬于觀點選擇類.即投票題I.此類題I要求觀點一定要明確.并對自己的觀點進行淪述.通常只需要淪述一方面就可以了，非常慶幸的是這次的題目中有類似的，如果努力復(fù)習(xí)的話對學(xué)生們是十分有利的。因此正文段可以采取體現(xiàn)文法的1+1結(jié)構(gòu):

　　開頭段:背景描述+表明觀點

　　很明顯，在大部分家庭當(dāng)中給孩子影響應(yīng)該是父母T , (Obviously. in most cases the earliest teachers people have are their parents. and parents are generally most concerned about the development of their children.)這種影響不僅體現(xiàn)在孩子們的早期學(xué)習(xí)和性格培養(yǎng).同樣也體現(xiàn)在孩子的前程表現(xiàn)為工作選擇(job selection)上.most of people認為父母對于孩子理解深(know kids very well).因此孩子們應(yīng)該選擇與父母相似的職業(yè).但是我并不這么認為。標簽：雅思教育類作文范文