雅思寫作范文匯總一次成功的復(fù)議
2024-08-05 15:49:25 來源:中國教育在線
雅思寫作范文匯總一次成功的復(fù)議,很多同學(xué)對于這個問題有疑問和不解,那么下面就跟著中國教育在線的小編詳細(xì)了解一下吧。
本文來自雅思作文網(wǎng)liuxue86.com《一次成功的復(fù)議》。
我的寫作成績值得復(fù)議嗎?
賴?yán)蠋?
您好. 我是您108期周末班的龔雪媚. 在您批改的作文中大多得6+, 您對我的評語就是英語表達(dá)超6,組織得好就能拿7的那位同學(xué).
我在9月23日參加的考試,寫作居然只有5分.那次的大作文寫的是"越來越多的人開私家車,說說優(yōu)點(diǎn)和缺點(diǎn)".我是這樣寫的:
優(yōu)點(diǎn):私家車能繁榮經(jīng)濟(jì), 特別是汽車工業(yè).
方便, 能隨時隨地到任何地方,不用象公交車一樣限定線路和時間.
舒適, 不用擠公交車.
缺點(diǎn):令道路更堵塞,特別是上下班高峰期.
汽油供應(yīng)短缺,很多私家車需要排隊(duì)加油(以廣州為例)
造成更多的環(huán)境污染.
結(jié)尾: 認(rèn)為開私家車的缺點(diǎn)大于優(yōu)點(diǎn).
考完出來自我感覺良好, 不知是否我這樣寫離題了才得個5分, 還請賴?yán)蠋熤更c(diǎn).
我這樣寫可以拿6分嗎? 我想申請成績復(fù)議, 值得這樣做嗎?
賴?yán)蠋熁貜?fù):
yes,i think u'd better go for an application of reevaluating. anyway, i’ll still need to tell u some mistakes u made.
now let me try to simulate how the examiner was looking at your task2 n then drew such a stupid conclusion.
the first idea(advantage) is not based on comparison and contrast----more private cars help boom the car manufacturing industryà not a right idea. but the second one hits the point---convenience. how about the drawbacks? traffic jams caused---hmmmm..good idea. more pollution is created---good too. but queue to fill up tanks with gasoline----hmmmm...u might not express it in a coherent way.
after all, u included one good point for the positive side n one for the negative side. i believe u definitely deserve a chance to get band 6. the examiner probably only read the first bit of the advantages n then turned to briefly examine the last part and hence marked your paper like this. if u apply for reassessing, the entire paper( two tasks) will be scrutinized by another examiner, n the good points will not be missed. this is why i tend to encourage u to have a try.
if unclear, call me .
good luck! Andrew
學(xué)生最后來郵
I'm glad to tell you that my writing is re-marked as band 6. Thank you very much for the encouragement, otherwise I may lose the confidence to apply the remark.
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